Till the End
Hello. Let me start off by saying this is the fourth sonnet I've written, but it is my first to be posted anywhere. I started getting into sonnet writing more than a month ago and I found it enjoying....
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On the up side, the meter is consistent iambic pentamer; the piece has fourteen lines; and there's a discernible volta. Beyond these formal requirements, though, there's too much shop-worn imagery,...
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Ramos,I can't be very positive, I'm sorry.I was going to ask if you're from a non-English-speaking background, but your intro leads me to discard that inquiry. You obviously write well enough, so why...
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You are allowed to have more than two periods in a sonnet.(That's the main feeling I got: how hard will this guy work to avoid ending a sentence?)
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Hi,You understand the mechanics, but, as you've heard the content is pretty sketchy.Embrace is a very overused rhyme word-- I'd avoid it, especially when mixed in with some of your other clich...
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Some of these expressions are so unlike idiomatic English that I wonder whether you are a native speaker. I don't mean to be unkind in bringing this up. If English is your first language, the first...
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Dear Ramos, I hope the above criticisms don't discourage you from writing. They shouldn't discourage you. They are good, helpful criticisms. How do you speak when you are talking to other people? When...
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Hey Ramos,Discovering the sonnet and writing in this most difficult of formats is in some ways like discovering yourself. I would be surprised to find any native English speaker who THINKS inside...
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Well I appreciate and thank you all for your wonderful criticisms. You guys are right, English is my second language (Spanish being primary). So I guess this is probably part of the reason my poem...
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